Brian, this is fine work. It speaks to me in the language of an ordinary/extraordinary life: the comforts of home, dog friendship, the constant beauty of nature, and aging gracefully with my longtime love. Swimming in this river of Time...who knows how long we get to have any of these quotidian miracles? I love how you say it: "the person that learns to live from this truth in a way that does not impose on the world but *gives* to the world" Poets have the incredible honor of giving this way. Thank you for the gift of this poem and especially for the vulnerability to let your readers see the making of it.
"Initially I thought I would keep the description as is, and call it a slanted truth"
This brought a smile to my lips. I would have been perfectly fine with this slanted truth.
I'm still stunned by the rhythm and words of that first line of Emily's poem. It's engrained into my brain, so thanks for making that happen with Memory :)
Your own poem is one of my favourites. It feels so observational and enticing. Love the breakdown, thanks Brian!
Brian, this is fine work. It speaks to me in the language of an ordinary/extraordinary life: the comforts of home, dog friendship, the constant beauty of nature, and aging gracefully with my longtime love. Swimming in this river of Time...who knows how long we get to have any of these quotidian miracles? I love how you say it: "the person that learns to live from this truth in a way that does not impose on the world but *gives* to the world" Poets have the incredible honor of giving this way. Thank you for the gift of this poem and especially for the vulnerability to let your readers see the making of it.
Thanks Ann! It means a ton to me that you read and respond, thank you!
Very good and Emily would very likely have enjoyed that whole thing.
Thanks Weston :)
"Initially I thought I would keep the description as is, and call it a slanted truth"
This brought a smile to my lips. I would have been perfectly fine with this slanted truth.
I'm still stunned by the rhythm and words of that first line of Emily's poem. It's engrained into my brain, so thanks for making that happen with Memory :)
Your own poem is one of my favourites. It feels so observational and enticing. Love the breakdown, thanks Brian!
Thanks Nathan! I’m glad you’re riding along!
Something worth pondering here is ED’s frequent use of slant rhyme as well. Great post.
That is a great call out!