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The train is a strong image of the way life can line-up behind a single decision. The poet reminds us of how limiting a "one-track mind" can be.

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Do you think the formatting leans into this idea, too? A singular line of text running vertically, almost, each so narrow.

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Definitely. A train of words. I love the way line breaks and white space can help shape the thoughts inside a poem.

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Yes, it's a thing I'd love to read more about, knowing little about poetry. I'd love to hear more on how much the actual formatting plays a role in constructing some poems.

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If it’s done well, definitely impactful. And I think this poem is a good example. I think there are many examples where it feels distracting though. Of course what is “well” for one is “distracting” for another, so….

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I think that the format of a poem can have a strong impact on the interpretation and the impression it leaves you with. I have written a few essays on poetry if you’re interested.

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Yes, please! I’d love to read what you’ve written.

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Ann, If you read these essays, you will notice some repetition of details and for that I apologize. One day I hope to put together a book on writing poetry and when I do there will be EDITING! Here are six essays on writing poetry. I have another one coming out this month.

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/on-writing-poetry

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/sunday-essay-on-publishing-and-poetry

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/prose-on-poetry-2

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/essay-on-writing-poetry

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/this-is-an-essay-on-one-aspect-of

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/tantrums-and-editing

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Nathan, I’m a beginner, too. Like you, my brain has been formed in the sciences. When it comes to poetry, I just know what I like :) I love words and the potency of words. Someone said that poems are the “shapes that thoughts come in.”

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That’s a good poem. Because of our largely unrealized lives I would change the last word to “realized”

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Oooh, interesting!

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